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I haven't seen Pretender in a long time, and this reminded me of why I liked Jarod so much...the cleverness and determination and innocence (not that he saw himself as an innocent) of him. Nicely done.
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Ah. You make me want to watch some Pretender now. I wouldn't have expected it. :) Good job.
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Lovely. And very much in character for Jarod.
Thank you.
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Nicely done, though I have to ask if you've seen the entire show yet? 'Cause there's an ep that does show his reason for leaving . . .
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An interesting look at Jarod's thought process and motivations, and, I would think, fitting with the television program.
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I don't remember ever reading a fanfiction story about why he left and the timing. In some ways they gave him a lot of information to do his scenarios but also shielded him from so much. Your story bridges some of the inconsistencies between the original pilot and later eps that showed such a drab cell he lived in and the harsh conditions they exposed him to in the experiments. I always thought that the original room was more likely to support his high intellect and curiosity that the Centre relied on for their money and power. This story is a nice fill in that has been missing, in my opinion.
The reference to Parker knowing about the origami figure, which wouldn't necessarily be easy to idenitfy, hints at a flashback never shown on the tv about why she would know it. Episodes support his use of origami at times. There is a lot of the background that hasn't been explored (at all or a little) by either canon or fanfiction. For example, it would be interesting to see something, by you, about Parker's fencing exercises.
Good story. Hope you continue to write.
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An interesting look at Jarod's motivations and the moment when it all became too much and he had to get away, not for himself, only, but for all of the others he might go on to hurt if he stayed because of the way in which his simulations were being used, which, of course wouldn't make him feel good at all. So, yes, he did have to leave, and you showed that here.
I think, though, that the Center is spelt Centre. I'd always spelt it the American way, too, to try to keep it... how do you say... aunthentic, but it may actually be spelt the other way to pay respect to the original founder, who, as we know from the second movie, is said to have hailed from Scotland, or an island off the Scottish coast. I'm not 100% sure, but I think it's spelt the other way.
Anyway, good job. And, yes, I didn't notice any spelling mistakes or little misuse of words by accident in this version, which was very nice. I make far too many mistakes in my own work, so I know how it feels when you don't. It's great!
I hope you continue to write stories for this show. There's been a downturn in its popularity with fanfiction writers over the years, I think.
:-)
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You're right, the lyrics do fit Jarod so perfectly! I've never heard this song. I'll have to look it up! I wish they would do a prequel movie/series. I think it would be fascinating and I'm glad you touched on that a little bit!
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